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Civitas Institute press release about the importance of education absolutely riddled with grammatical errors

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Civitas Institute is a Raleigh-based conservative think tank that advocates for all the usual conservative causes — and then some! As the INDY has pointed out, Civitas has rather broad—one might say paranoid—views regarding what constitutes liberalism. For example, Civitas's website, Mapping the Left, identifies the AARP as "one of the most powerful liberal lobbying groups" in America. The N.C. Coalition Against Sexual Assault and the N.C. Coalition Against Domestic Violence are likewise part of a "nefarious" network of left-wing activism. Good to know. 

In a press release sent Friday at 6:40 p.m. (great timing!), Civitas announced some kind of town hall meeting it's holding about education savings accounts, which are probably some version of school vouchers. It doesn't matter. What matters is how poorly written the release is. The irony is breathtaking. 

The link is here, but in case it gets edited or taken down, there’s a screenshot above. Although it's not shown in the screenshot, the subject line of the e-mail reads: "Education Cant Wait- School Choice Town Hall Event." 

Our edits: 

1. "Cant" requires an apostrophe after the n and before the t
2. Em dash or colon instead of hyphen after Wait.
3. In the first sentence, "an education" is redundant. It should read, "Every child deserves a quality education that fits the child's particular needs." 
4. Actually, the second use of "child" in the first sentence is also redundant. Change to "his or her."  
5. Pretty sure the word Civitas is looking for here is "hollow," not "hallow." 
6. No double space after the period in the second sentence. 
7. No double space after the second parenthesis in the fourth sentence. 
8. No double space after "parents" in the fourth sentence. 
9. No double space after "how" in the fourth sentence. 
10. Add a space after the period in the fourth sentence. 
11. In final sentence, remove the apostrophe after the n and before the s

Other than that, looks good! 

Update: Thanks to commenter Stefan Rogers for noting that “drink” in “Free food and Drink” should not be capitalized. 
Update 2: As the folks at Civitas so graciously noted, the original version of this blog post corrected their misspelling of
cant incorrectly. It’s been corrected. Sorry about that. 


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